lots to say
ok. the beginning bass line is a bit off key with the guitar parts, it just doesnt mesh together well. maybe you need to ride the bass up and down in keys as the guitar rises and falls.
both the bass and guitar are muddied quality-wise, compared to the rest of the track. (probably because you used a utility to make the rest instead of recording.)
the track doesnt flow very well, because there are alot of different elements that segway along. you need a more concrete vision. it goes from guster-ish in the first 30 secs to more abstract, almost DnB. pull it together.
very interesting, at least.